MadameFLY,
While listening to your wonderful mix the thought of added poetry reading or snip-its entered my mind. But, it wasn't until last night that a few specifics came to mind.
For the poetry reading bit: an Overlay of someone reading poetry (duh!). Of course it would depend on the poem, but have it spoken with a "matter of fact" tone and emphasis during some of your musical segments. If it were my mix, I might even try spacing the verses throughout the total mix. Sorry I can't give a poetry example. I would also overlay the ocean surf, or wind, or some other Enya-ish thing.
For the snip-it bit: I would use snip-its from movies; again, perhaps to tell a story. Two snip-its that I thought of for your specific mix are from the movie "Say Anything." First, Ione Skye's character Diane says "He pointed out some glass in the road." The way she delivers the lines surrounding this line with a hint of nasal sound and a bit of a slur---it carries emotion. Then, the John Cusack's character Lloyd delivers his famous line, "I gave her my heart and she gave me a pen." ...Well, I think you get the idea.
I like your brake effect idea, I am just not sure where I would put it in your mix. I will listen to your mix again with this in mind.
Keep up the wonderful work.
---JET
